How Clarity, Structure, and Identity Make All the Difference
The Real Problem
Most students stuck at Band 6 think the issue is vocabulary or grammar.
But what really holds them back?
Lack of structure
Confused argument flow
Weak examples
And a voice that feels unsure
This page will show you what clarity sounds like — and how structure alone can change everything.
Step 1: Read the Band 6 Essay
Imagine you’re the examiner. What score would you give this?
What to look for:
- Flat intro (“some people think…”)
- Vague points (“it is very useful”)
- Repetitive vocabulary
- No clear logic between sentences
- Ending that doesn’t really “close” the argument
Step 2: Read the Band 7+ Essay
Now read the band 7 version — exact same question, same topic but structured and precise.
Notice:
- The intro leads with confidence
- Topic sentences frame ideas clearly
- Transitions guide you from idea to idea
- Vocabulary is accurate, not fancy
- The conclusion resolves tension and gives insight
Step 3: Sentence Upgrades That Matter
Here are three Band 6 → Band 7 rewrites from the same essay:
| Band 6 | Band 7+ |
|---|---|
| “Globalisation is very useful because it helps the economy.” | “Globalisation drives economic growth by opening new markets and enabling international trade.” |
| “People enjoy foreign music and food.” | “Cultural exchange has expanded through global media and travel, leading to the adoption of new lifestyles.” |
| “We must focus on the bad effects more.” | “We must actively address the negative consequences to ensure globalisation benefits all societies.” |
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Final Reflection
Globalisation isn’t just a test topic — it’s a mirror of your thinking.
When you improve your structure, your clarity improves.
When you upgrade your sentence flow, your identity changes.
When you think like a Band 7 writer — you write like one.
And we’re here to help you get there.
This is Lesson 1 of our IELTS Power Writing course.
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